Critique of "I Wanna Be Touched"

I have chosen the Herb Sinus song “I Wanna Be Touched” for this month’s critique. I think the song is a good platform for taking a look at phrasing and chord progressions and the subtle variations that can make all the difference in the success of a song. This is a critique of “I Wanna Be Touched” by Herb Sinus. You’ll find the original workshop here . Form First, let’s take a look at the song’s form and how it might be improved. Verse B section Chorus Verse B section Chorus Instrumental Break Verse Chorus This type of form is workable when there is enough variation in chord progression and phrasing, but I did not find that to be the case. The issue would have been helped by shortening the B sections to two lines, and perhaps creating a bridge (being a new melody section), in lieu of the final verse. I will explore this more in the melody and lyric sections.